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Post by stardragon on Apr 26, 2006 22:22:11 GMT -5
All New Persona's must be posted here first for discussion/changes and approval before you may post it to the appropriate color/craft/etc section of profiles.
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Post by Frostwing on May 10, 2006 4:53:29 GMT -5
Owner: Frostwing
Name: Selina Age: 17 Rank: Candidate Gender: Female Family: S'len (NPC) Karaina (Deceased in childbirth) Sisters: Kasha (11 currently living with a foster mother at Ruatha), Skye (3 Living with a foster mother at starfall)
Appearance: Moderate length black hair and grey eyes. Stunningly pretty in a simple and non-seductive way. She is tall and thin. Her hands are thin and almsot delicate to appearance with long fingers. Her ears are an odd shape like her fathers, almost coming to a point instead of being rounded. Her lips are of decent proportions and she is almost always smiling like her mother used to be.
Personality: Quiet but friendly, and will, when needed, voice her opinions. She doesn't take any disrespect and has always loved dragons having lived near them her whole life. When her father came and told her she was going to be a candidate she was so happy. She is gentle when she speaks and the way she acts.
History: Born in the lower caverns when her father, the brown-rider S'len had a love affair with her mother, a lower caverns worker. He was honourable though and made it official. They soon fell in love for real resulting in another two children. On the third Selina's mother died. Her father came to her when she was 13 and told her she was to be a candidate. She failed many years and was tempted to drop out. But her father took her to one side and told her how proud he was she didnt cry on the sands and that she kept on smiling throughout, seemingly unafraid. So she stayed this will be her fourth and final year trying for a dragon, hoepfully this time she'll have luck.
Pet(s): none
Dragon Color Options: Gold (*really wants gold* LOL) Dragon Name Options: Syarrath, Laurath, Carilnoth Dragon Personality: Kind and soft a very motherly type. She will mother anything she can get her claws on. When a loved one is threatend she will do anything to protect them.
Father: Name: S'len Rank: Brownrider apperance: Much like Selina as she take most after her father. He has black hair and blue eyes. He's muscled and sturdy looking almost gruff in appearance due to several unexplaninable scars probably a skin disease earlier in life. Personality: He loves his job, he's all about doing things good and proper. Doesnt talk to people much anymore as he is still greiving the loss of his beloved wife. Based: Starfall
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Post by stardragon on May 10, 2006 6:26:38 GMT -5
Hmm... ok let's see- Thin but quite shapely? That's a bit of an oxymoron. The pointy ears thing? That's just odd, makes it sound like you want her to be elf-like. If you have to point them out particularly it makes more sense to word it like 'her ears are an odd shape like her fathers, almost coming to a point instead of being rounded.' Or some such, because it is an oddity not the norm and would possibly cause her some issues. It's highly unusual to not Stand until 16 if she is raised in a weyr. Most weyrbrats would begin standing at 12 or 13. It's usually only holder children that tend to get Searched at older ages. There are no golds planned for a while unless we lose Marissa (which is looking more likely), and I will not allow a female on brown. Her only options as it stands right now would be green or blue. Though I haven't even had Fay Rise to mate yet let alone clutch so we have time to get worked out if we are going to have to drop off Marissa, making a gold egg a slight possibility. Oh and you need to give her siblings names and ages for future reference. And where did she grow up at? At Starfall? If so, or if that's where S'len is now, I need a mini-bio for him as an NPC.
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Post by Frostwing on May 15, 2006 18:07:34 GMT -5
Edited.
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Post by stardragon on May 15, 2006 19:30:12 GMT -5
Whee! Much better! Approved with one tiny add on, give her father's brown a name and break him off and place him in the Brownriders section. If he is adoptable please list him as NPC Adoptable, if not please list him as PNPC - Frostwing.
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